The first thing I want to change, after reviewing my paper, is the way I finish my paper. As of right now, I finish with a paragraph about how it is not technology that is the problem, but rather the people that are using it. This is after my whole paper argues that technology is bad. I want to add another paragraph on to the end of my paper where I describe what the point of my paper is. If technology is a valuable tool, and it is the people causing all of the problems, why did I argue that technology is so awful? I want to answer this question by saying that there is nothing that we can really do about people misusing technology. It is a valuable tool and at this point it is so prevalent that we cannot get rid of it or restrict it now. I want to propose the idea that we need to do a better job educating children and teens on how to properly use technology, and we need to do a better job teaching them good ethics. Beyond this change to the end of my paper, I want to go through and see if I need to add more explanations of quotes, and then look for local edits that I should make.